Week 13 Story: Asus and More Ligh
[continued from last week]
After this interaction, Ligh and Asus became inseparable. Asus was thrilled to share her tricks to a mentee, something that was surprising to Ligh and those who were familiar with the arrangement. Whenever Asus was not performing, she was speaking with a deliberate voice in hushed conversations with Ligh. As the worldwide tour continued, the two could be seen together at all hours of the day, crouching at the stone-working table and speaking in hushed voices. By the end of the journey, Ligh had become a master at performing all but one of Asus' tricks. The one that remained in need of work and continued studies was Asus' famous ability to turn gold into lead. The other abilities, from works of true alchemy to basic skills surrounding sleight of hand, had all become second nature to the young apprentice. Unfortunately for Ligh, Asus' mastery of this one final skill would leave room for only one true Master of Golden Lead.
Near the end of their time together, Ligh had begun to hint to her teacher that she wanted to learn the paramount trick before Asus left to retire for good. Asus was thrilled to have such an enthusiastic student, but was concerned. Not only because the exchange was dangerous and technical, but also for the more aesthetic reason that this final trick was her last card. If Ligh was able to execute it, there would be nothing left for Asus to consider her own. But, desiring to leave a legacy and the continuation of her work, Asus began to set the groundwork in their lessons so that Ligh would have the platform of skills needed to take on the formidable challenge of turning gold into lead. They began training earlier in the day and continued by the light of an oil lamp long into the night. They had developed a routine of constant experimentation and a series of trial and error that helped Ligh grow more and more confident in her abilities.
Author's Note: Finishing another segment of this story is something that I have been looking forward to last week. Focusing on the plot points instead of character development, as learned from the reading I have done recently, has been playing out quite well. I have begun to hint at more elements of the personalities, but still trying to keep the same folklore-focus element as found in the past readings. I am very excited to finish the story with a culminating chapter that I think will continue to tie together the unit.
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Story Source: Eva March Tappan's The Chaucer Story Book. Link.
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Near the end of their time together, Ligh had begun to hint to her teacher that she wanted to learn the paramount trick before Asus left to retire for good. Asus was thrilled to have such an enthusiastic student, but was concerned. Not only because the exchange was dangerous and technical, but also for the more aesthetic reason that this final trick was her last card. If Ligh was able to execute it, there would be nothing left for Asus to consider her own. But, desiring to leave a legacy and the continuation of her work, Asus began to set the groundwork in their lessons so that Ligh would have the platform of skills needed to take on the formidable challenge of turning gold into lead. They began training earlier in the day and continued by the light of an oil lamp long into the night. They had developed a routine of constant experimentation and a series of trial and error that helped Ligh grow more and more confident in her abilities.
Author's Note: Finishing another segment of this story is something that I have been looking forward to last week. Focusing on the plot points instead of character development, as learned from the reading I have done recently, has been playing out quite well. I have begun to hint at more elements of the personalities, but still trying to keep the same folklore-focus element as found in the past readings. I am very excited to finish the story with a culminating chapter that I think will continue to tie together the unit.
Image Link.
Story Source: Eva March Tappan's The Chaucer Story Book. Link.
Hey Carl,
ReplyDeleteJust read the story and I must say that you did a fantastic job. I noticed some of those hints that you mentioned in the Author's note. It really is fun to incorporate that kind of stuff into stories, but it often times can be hard without manipulating the flow of the story. Great job meshing it all together and making the story easily follow able. I like how you picked up right off from where you were last week, as often times my stories are all over the place. Great job and keep up the good work!
Hey there Carl,
ReplyDeleteI just finished up reading your story and it was a great read. I can really tell how much effort you put into the creation of this story, just by the fact that once the reader started it, they couldn’t stop until the end of the story. I really enjoyed the image that you used to draw the story together as well!
Hi there Carl!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you took this week as an opportunity to finish up and expand on last week's story! I can tell that you really worked to make the story fully fleshed out and engaging throughout, which I appreciated. I also really liked all the little personality hints that you mentioned in your author's note. Great work!
-Kate
Hey Carl!
ReplyDeleteGreat story. I read the first part on your website and I love master/apprentice type stories so I'm glad I could follow it up and read the next part. I like what you did with the characters' development. As you mentioned, you focused more on plot that character develop, but I think the subtly gave us a glimpse at the character's personalities, just the right amount to have a general idea. I also reraly like the image you chose for this story. It sets the mood wonderfully.